Wednesday, March 17, 2010

Dissatisfaction

This week's Three Word Wednesday micro fiction piece:


Mac pushed the shard deeper into Jenkins chest. Once the twitching and moaning stopped, he checked for a pulse. Satisfied the man was dead, he heaved a weary sigh, collected all his tools and left, hoping the next assignment would offer at least a glimmer of excitement or he feared his heart was going to stop beating too.

15 comments:

ThomG said...

I absolutely love how you capture so much in so few words.

Lilibeth said...

I love the Mack and Jenkins. It's Mafia from the first line on.

Carina said...

A weary hit man. I like it!

Angel said...

Thank you all so much. I love micro fiction!

Stan Ski said...

It's all about job satisfaction,

Amity said...

Gruesome!

A serial killer? Is it?

This is just as frightening Angel!

Nicely done! Haven't tried macro fiction!

This is my 2nd week at 3WW and I am enjoying it...please drop by...:)

Angel said...

Thanks, Stan and Amity! And he is more a hired gun than a serial killer, although alot of people do still die...lol

Thomma Lyn said...

BWAH!!! Sharp and short and POW. Great job!

Andy Sewina said...

Phew, I think you hit this right!

Dorothy said...

One paragraph and it took me two pages. Very graphic and to the point. Liked it.

ThomG said...

Angel, as far as "After"is concerned, yes, he's dead. How? Up for interpretation.

Dee Martin said...

Poor thing, he's in a rut isn't he? Loved it!

Jay Thurston said...

How monotonous a job can become, whatever the job is... I suppose. Interesting twist, an apathetic killer. Loved it!

Tumblewords: said...

I don't know whether to cheer him on or hope for boredom in his next job. :) Good write.

Angel said...

Thank you all so much for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed my little story.