Wednesday, October 6, 2010

Desire

I have two little micro fiction pieces for the Three Word Wednesday prompt this week.


Story 1:

Ryan stopped short at Sandra’s demand. He was reconsidering his next move when he noticed the hint of sweat on her brow. As he slowly rubbed his hand across her arm, her sharp intake of breath and the sheen of lust in her eyes told him all he needed to know.

Story 2:

The sun was just a hint over the horizon but a sheen of sweat already covered Tyler’s neck. He spotted his prey when the man stepped from the bunker, and, sighting the rifle, took his shot. The feeling when the bullet struck and the man’s head flew apart satisfied some deep desire for blood lust in his soul that he refused to recognize but had to keep sating nonetheless.

15 comments:

pia said...

They're both interesting but I really like the first. It told a whole good story in very few words

Angel said...

Thanks. The first is my favorite too.

K said...

These two pieces are very complimentary. They satisfy my lust for intrigue and violence. Nice micros.

Tumblewords: said...

I'm impressed - two shorts! The second one sounds like it could be part of a longer story. Nice work on both of them!

R.S. Bohn said...

I can't say I like either better than the other -- they're both v. good in their own way.

Okay, maybe as a woman, I did like the first one a tiny bit more. ;)

ThomG said...

I, too, like the first. It says so much, with so little words.

Janet Lingel Aldrich said...

The first was beautiful and the second frightening, but both are good. Good work!

Sumit Sarkar said...

Wow...wonderful....I too loved the first one more... :)

Ramesh Sood said...

well written.. both are good and talk about lust in different ways..

jaerose said...

Powerful stories - small and mighty! I was left wondering if they were connected - if the bullet was aimed at the man in the first story by the man in the second and the woman saw it coming? Jae

nimaruichi said...

Liked your take on the three words. Keep it up.

gautami tripathy said...

I like the first one. Somehow it makes a better impact.

a subtle hint

Angel said...

Thank you all for reading and commenting on my little stories! I'm glad you liked them!

OMJ said...

Proof that lust comes in many forms!

Christine said...

Wow! I am floored by these! I also preferred the first one, but both had a lot of pop! Wonderful.