Three stories for the Three Word Wednesday prompt this week. Same plot, different versions. Which is your favorite?
Jarred thought he was ok until he felt a jolt, along with a surge of adrenaline, when he saw the parachute detach from the plane.
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With a jolt, the parachute detached from the plane, sending a surge of adrenaline through Jarred as he gazed at the ground approaching.
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Adrenaline surged through Jarred when he saw the parachute of the guy in front of him detach from the plane. With a jolt from behind, he realized he was next, and suddenly, he wasn’t so sure about this latest midlife crisis of his.
13 comments:
Definitely like the last one best. More plot.
Hard choice, but I like the first one the best.
Definitely number three because we take the story on ourselves to imagine the scenario.
i kind of like the third one best but they are all good.
Thanks for reading, y'all. Seems #3 is winnig so far.
The story opens like a flower..a canopy..detail by detail falling through the sky..and your perfectly chosen words..Jae
Thanks so much for the comments!
I like the last one best, and the first one second best, but they all have impact.
Great use of three words. Please read my attempt.
All three are great but I think I love the last one best. As a middle aged women who is always trying something new and exciting.
Great work with the words.
Blessings
I like the second and third one. :-)
Middle one, definitely. There's something about the ground rushing up to meet him that I like *grin*
Thanks so much for reading, y'all. Glad at least one of the stories appealed you to.
Laurie, the third vignette really
got my mind involved.
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