Wednesday, February 1, 2012

Perspective

Three stories for the Three Word Wednesday prompt this week. Same plot, different versions. Which is your favorite?



Jarred thought he was ok until he felt a jolt, along with a surge of adrenaline, when he saw the parachute detach from the plane.


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With a jolt, the parachute detached from the plane, sending a surge of adrenaline through Jarred as he gazed at the ground approaching.

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Adrenaline surged through Jarred when he saw the parachute of the guy in front of him detach from the plane. With a jolt from behind, he realized he was next, and suddenly, he wasn’t so sure about this latest midlife crisis of his.

13 comments:

Denise Moncrief said...

Definitely like the last one best. More plot.

Laurie Kolp said...

Hard choice, but I like the first one the best.

oldegg said...

Definitely number three because we take the story on ourselves to imagine the scenario.

Sheilagh Lee said...

i kind of like the third one best but they are all good.

Angel said...

Thanks for reading, y'all. Seems #3 is winnig so far.

jaerose said...

The story opens like a flower..a canopy..detail by detail falling through the sky..and your perfectly chosen words..Jae

Angel said...

Thanks so much for the comments!

Alice Audrey said...

I like the last one best, and the first one second best, but they all have impact.

Great use of three words. Please read my attempt.

Bethe77 said...

All three are great but I think I love the last one best. As a middle aged women who is always trying something new and exciting.
Great work with the words.
Blessings

Chris said...

I like the second and third one. :-)

Mojo Writin' said...

Middle one, definitely. There's something about the ground rushing up to meet him that I like *grin*

Angel said...

Thanks so much for reading, y'all. Glad at least one of the stories appealed you to.

Marie said...

Laurie, the third vignette really
got my mind involved.