Sunday, September 21, 2008

Yearning

This is my entry into the 100 Words challenge. It's the first time I've played with them. I hope I did everything right and it's ok. This seems like it will be fun.


“Oh, it looks so good! All gooey and sweet.”

“I can smell it from here, I swear. It should be against the law to make something that smells that good.”

“Don’t they know over half of Americans are fat? They shouldn’t be tempting us like this!”

“Just one little bite shouldn’t hurt. I can stop at one. It looks very rich.”

“I really have to get one. There’s no question about it. I’ll skip dinner.”

***

“Humph, sorry didn’t see you there, Karen.”

“It’s ok. How are you doing?” Karen asked.

“Fine. I have 3 whole points left for the day!”

6 comments:

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Very nicely done! I've been doing the 100 words prompt for a few months now. It's still challenging, but always fun.

Angel said...

Thanks!

I had to go back and cut four words to make it exactly 100 for this one. Wasn't too hard this time, but I'm sure some of them will be.

thenightblog said...

Heh heh you got it. I usually have to go back and cut at least 20. The dialogue reminds me of the rationalization I go through every time I want to stop at Starbucks on the way to school O.o

Angel said...

I don't count points, but do carbs so I know exactly how my character feels..lol.

Anthony James Barnett - author said...

Well observed. Short, shorts are always very difficult.

ANthony.

Angel said...

I really like doing the short shorts. They are fun.